四级写作经典范文及点评:为何年少总缺觉?
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你有没有在课堂上进入梦乡的经历?随着社会的进步,学校教育和学生成长越来越多地受到关注,其中青少年因为缺觉而导致的各方面问题逐渐成为大家讨论的话题。
Why are Children Lacking Sleep?
Just how important is school nowadays? Teachers often complain that homework is not done well and that students are often arriving at school delayed and yawning through lack of sleep.
There are, it seems, two main explanations for this. Firstly, many young children stay up late to watch TV programs suitable for them, which may finish as late as 8:00.① No child wants to admit not having seen what everybody else has.
Secondly, a growing number of older children, particularly those approaching school?leaving age are taking up part time evening or weekend work.②They feel that working experience, not academic qualification will help them find jobs on leaving school.
One can sympathize with both groups of children but it doesn’t make a teacher’s life any easier.
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行文点评
文章开头先描述了学校现在普遍存在的一种现象。孩子们因为缺觉,不是作业完成不好,就是上课迟到呵欠连天。出现这种情况到底是为什么呢?接下来的两段中分别陈述了两种可能的解释。其一是孩子们要熬夜看电视节目,因为他们不愿意承认自己没看到别人都看过的节目。其二是快要毕业的孩子在做兼职,因为工作经历非常重要。最后文章得出结论:虽然这两种情况似乎都有情可原,但却给老师带来了麻烦。
文章短小精炼,结构紧凑。开篇以问句形式引出话题,引起读者关注。随后提出现象然后进行阐述。两种解释之间用firstly和secondly引出,实现了段落与段落之间的联系,保证了全文的连贯性。
好文妙译
为何年少总缺觉?
如今学校有多重要?老师经常抱怨学生们不是作业做得不好,就是经常上课迟到,并因为缺觉而呵欠连天。
看起来这种现象主要有两种解释。首先,许多小孩子看电视熬夜到很晚,那些适合他们的节目也许要持续到八点才能结束。没有孩子愿意承认自己没看过别人都看过的节目。
其次,越来越多稍大点的孩子,尤其是那些接近离校年龄的孩子,开始在晚上或周末做兼职工作。他们觉得毕业时能帮他们找到工作的是工作经历而不是学业程度。
我们可以对这两类孩子表示同情,但是这无法使老师的日子更好过些。
词汇斟酌
?yawn vi. 打呵欠
?academic a. 学校的,学院的,学术的;纯理论的,不切实际的;n. 大学教师
?qualification n. 资格,资历
?sympathize vi. 同情
佳句临摹
①【注释】stay up to熬夜,不睡觉
【临摹】She let the children stay up to see a film on television.她允许孩子熬夜看电视上播放的电影。
②【注释】take up开始从事
【临摹】He took up art while at school.他在学校时开始对艺术感兴趣。
思如泉涌
Perhaps you can’t control your job, but you may be able to make other changes in your life.或许你不能支配自己的工作,但你能够改变生活的其他方面。
You cannot burn the candle at both ends.蜡烛不能两头点,精力不可过分耗。
Why are Children Lacking Sleep?
Just how important is school nowadays? Teachers often complain that homework is not done well and that students are often arriving at school delayed and yawning through lack of sleep.
There are, it seems, two main explanations for this. Firstly, many young children stay up late to watch TV programs suitable for them, which may finish as late as 8:00.① No child wants to admit not having seen what everybody else has.
Secondly, a growing number of older children, particularly those approaching school?leaving age are taking up part time evening or weekend work.②They feel that working experience, not academic qualification will help them find jobs on leaving school.
One can sympathize with both groups of children but it doesn’t make a teacher’s life any easier.
[133 words]
行文点评
文章开头先描述了学校现在普遍存在的一种现象。孩子们因为缺觉,不是作业完成不好,就是上课迟到呵欠连天。出现这种情况到底是为什么呢?接下来的两段中分别陈述了两种可能的解释。其一是孩子们要熬夜看电视节目,因为他们不愿意承认自己没看到别人都看过的节目。其二是快要毕业的孩子在做兼职,因为工作经历非常重要。最后文章得出结论:虽然这两种情况似乎都有情可原,但却给老师带来了麻烦。
文章短小精炼,结构紧凑。开篇以问句形式引出话题,引起读者关注。随后提出现象然后进行阐述。两种解释之间用firstly和secondly引出,实现了段落与段落之间的联系,保证了全文的连贯性。
好文妙译
为何年少总缺觉?
如今学校有多重要?老师经常抱怨学生们不是作业做得不好,就是经常上课迟到,并因为缺觉而呵欠连天。
看起来这种现象主要有两种解释。首先,许多小孩子看电视熬夜到很晚,那些适合他们的节目也许要持续到八点才能结束。没有孩子愿意承认自己没看过别人都看过的节目。
其次,越来越多稍大点的孩子,尤其是那些接近离校年龄的孩子,开始在晚上或周末做兼职工作。他们觉得毕业时能帮他们找到工作的是工作经历而不是学业程度。
我们可以对这两类孩子表示同情,但是这无法使老师的日子更好过些。
词汇斟酌
?yawn vi. 打呵欠
?academic a. 学校的,学院的,学术的;纯理论的,不切实际的;n. 大学教师
?qualification n. 资格,资历
?sympathize vi. 同情
佳句临摹
①【注释】stay up to熬夜,不睡觉
【临摹】She let the children stay up to see a film on television.她允许孩子熬夜看电视上播放的电影。
②【注释】take up开始从事
【临摹】He took up art while at school.他在学校时开始对艺术感兴趣。
思如泉涌
Perhaps you can’t control your job, but you may be able to make other changes in your life.或许你不能支配自己的工作,但你能够改变生活的其他方面。
You cannot burn the candle at both ends.蜡烛不能两头点,精力不可过分耗。