四级写作经典范文及点评:志愿者
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世界因为爱心而变得温暖,人与人的互相帮助让我们的生活变得更加美好。志愿者就是这样的人。因为有了他们,我们的社会才更加和谐。
Volunteers
Each nation has many good people who help to take care of others.① For example, some high school and college students in the United States often spend many hours as volunteers in hospitals, orphanages or homes for the aged. They read books to the people in these places, or they just visit them or listen to their problems. Other young volunteers go and work in the homes of people who are sick or old. They paint, clean up, or repair houses, do their shopping and mow their lawns.② For boys who no longer have fathers there is an organization called Big Brothers. College students and other men take these boys to basketball games or on fishing trips and help them to get to know things that boys usually learn from their fathers.
Some cities have a number of clubs where boys and girls can go to play games or learn crafts. Some of these clubs show movies or organize short trips to the mountains, the beaches, museums or other places of interest. Most of these clubs use a lot of high school and college students as volunteers because they are young enough to remember the problems of younger boys and girls.
Volunteers believe that some of the happiest people in the world are those who help to bring happiness to others.
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行文点评
本文谈论的是志愿者问题。文章开始谈到每个国家都有许多善良的人愿意帮助照顾别人。并举出实例支持论点,然后描述了学生志愿者所做的不同工作。第二段从另一个角度分析一些组织也喜欢用学生做志愿者。最后一段言简意赅地阐述了志愿者的信念。
本文大量举例使文章内容充实而具体。some ... other结构的大量运用,使得文章结构更加清晰。
好文妙译
志愿者
每个国家都有许多善良的人们帮助照顾别人。例如,美国的一些高中生和大学生经常花大量时间在医院、孤儿院或老人院做志愿者。他们给患者、孩子和老人读书,或只是看望他们或听他们倾诉问题。另外一些青年志愿者则到病人或老人家中工作。他们涂刷墙面、打扫卫生或修理房屋、帮助购物、修整草坪。对那些不再有父亲的男孩子,有一个被称作“兄弟联谊会”的组织。大学生或其他男性带这些孩子参加篮球赛、外出钓鱼或帮助他们了解那些男孩子通常从父亲那儿学会的事情。
一些城市中有许多俱乐部,男孩和女孩可以去那里玩游戏或学手艺。有些俱乐部还放映电影或组织短途旅行,比如爬山、游览海滩、参观博物馆或其他名胜。大部分俱乐部用很多高中生和大学生作志愿者,因为他们年轻,还记得更年幼的孩子们的问题。
志愿者相信世界上有一部分最幸福的人就是那些给别人带来快乐的人。
词汇斟酌
?orphanage n. 孤儿院
?mow v. 割草,除草
?lawn n. 草地,草坪
?craft n. 工艺,手艺
?organize vt. 组织,编组
佳句临摹
①【注释】take care of照顾
【临摹】You’d better send for her tomorrow to take care of the children.你最好明天请她来照顾孩子们。
②【注释】clean up打扫干净
【临摹】It’s your turn to clean the bedroom up.轮到你收拾卧室了。
思如泉涌
The love that lasts longest is the love that is never returned.永恒的爱是无需回报的爱。
Virtue is bold, and goodness never fearful.美德是勇敢的,善良从来无所畏惧。品格修养篇
Volunteers
Each nation has many good people who help to take care of others.① For example, some high school and college students in the United States often spend many hours as volunteers in hospitals, orphanages or homes for the aged. They read books to the people in these places, or they just visit them or listen to their problems. Other young volunteers go and work in the homes of people who are sick or old. They paint, clean up, or repair houses, do their shopping and mow their lawns.② For boys who no longer have fathers there is an organization called Big Brothers. College students and other men take these boys to basketball games or on fishing trips and help them to get to know things that boys usually learn from their fathers.
Some cities have a number of clubs where boys and girls can go to play games or learn crafts. Some of these clubs show movies or organize short trips to the mountains, the beaches, museums or other places of interest. Most of these clubs use a lot of high school and college students as volunteers because they are young enough to remember the problems of younger boys and girls.
Volunteers believe that some of the happiest people in the world are those who help to bring happiness to others.
[222 words]
行文点评
本文谈论的是志愿者问题。文章开始谈到每个国家都有许多善良的人愿意帮助照顾别人。并举出实例支持论点,然后描述了学生志愿者所做的不同工作。第二段从另一个角度分析一些组织也喜欢用学生做志愿者。最后一段言简意赅地阐述了志愿者的信念。
本文大量举例使文章内容充实而具体。some ... other结构的大量运用,使得文章结构更加清晰。
好文妙译
志愿者
每个国家都有许多善良的人们帮助照顾别人。例如,美国的一些高中生和大学生经常花大量时间在医院、孤儿院或老人院做志愿者。他们给患者、孩子和老人读书,或只是看望他们或听他们倾诉问题。另外一些青年志愿者则到病人或老人家中工作。他们涂刷墙面、打扫卫生或修理房屋、帮助购物、修整草坪。对那些不再有父亲的男孩子,有一个被称作“兄弟联谊会”的组织。大学生或其他男性带这些孩子参加篮球赛、外出钓鱼或帮助他们了解那些男孩子通常从父亲那儿学会的事情。
一些城市中有许多俱乐部,男孩和女孩可以去那里玩游戏或学手艺。有些俱乐部还放映电影或组织短途旅行,比如爬山、游览海滩、参观博物馆或其他名胜。大部分俱乐部用很多高中生和大学生作志愿者,因为他们年轻,还记得更年幼的孩子们的问题。
志愿者相信世界上有一部分最幸福的人就是那些给别人带来快乐的人。
词汇斟酌
?orphanage n. 孤儿院
?mow v. 割草,除草
?lawn n. 草地,草坪
?craft n. 工艺,手艺
?organize vt. 组织,编组
佳句临摹
①【注释】take care of照顾
【临摹】You’d better send for her tomorrow to take care of the children.你最好明天请她来照顾孩子们。
②【注释】clean up打扫干净
【临摹】It’s your turn to clean the bedroom up.轮到你收拾卧室了。
思如泉涌
The love that lasts longest is the love that is never returned.永恒的爱是无需回报的爱。
Virtue is bold, and goodness never fearful.美德是勇敢的,善良从来无所畏惧。品格修养篇