英语四级写作经典范文附点评

　　Laptop computers are popular all over the world. People use them everywhere. They connect people to their work place. In the United States today, laptops also connect students to their classrooms.

　　Westlake College in Virginia will start a laptop computer program allowing students to study schoolwork anywhere they want. Within five years, each of the 1500 students at the college will receive a laptop. The laptops are a part of a $10 million computer program at Westlake. Students with laptops will also have access to the Internet.① In addition, they will be able to use e-mail to “speak” with their teachers, classmates, or families.② However, the most important part of the program is that students will be able to use computers without going to computer labs. They can work with it anywhere they like!

　　Because of the many changes in computer technology, laptop use in higher education is workable. As laptops become more powerful, they become more similar to desktop computers. In addition, portable computers can connect students to not only the Internet, but also libraries and other resources. State higher education officials are studying how laptops can help students.

　　At Westlake College, more than 60 percent of the staff uses the computers. The laptops will allow all teachers to use computers in their lessons. As one Westlake teacher said, “Here we are in the middle of Virginia and we’re giving students a window on the world. They can see everything and do everything.”

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　　行文点评

　　本文结构简明：理论+实例+理论+实例。首段首句直接点题，从而引出论点。随后非常自然地引出 笔记本电脑在美国的发展，为第二段有关韦斯特莱克大学的实例埋下了伏笔。第二段通过对韦斯特莱克大学的笔记本电脑计划的具体解析，阐明了笔记本电脑在学生学习中的重要作用。之后又在第三段中提出笔记本电脑在高等教育中应用的可行性。第四段再举实例并总结收拢全文。

　　本文语言平实，思路清晰，注重理论与实际相结合，有理有据，列举数字，引用例证等都增加了文章说服力，特别是最后一句引用一名老师的话，既水到渠成，又首尾呼应。

　　好文妙译

　　笔记本进军校园

　　笔记本电脑在全世界都很流行。随处都可见人们在使用它。它们将人和工作地点连接到一起。今天在美国，笔记本甚至将学生和教室连接了起来。

　　弗吉尼亚州的韦斯特莱克大学将要开始一项笔记本电脑计划，让学生能够在任意地方学习。五年之内，学校将有1500名学生每人得到一部笔记本电脑。这些电脑是韦斯特莱克大学斥资一千万美元实施的电脑计划的一部分。得到笔记本电脑的同学将有权使用互联网。另外，他们还能通过电子邮件同老师、同学甚至家人进行“交谈”。但是，该计划最重要的部分就是：学生不用去机房就能用上电脑。他们可以在自己喜欢的任何地方使用它!

　　电脑科技的变化发展使得笔记本电脑在高等教育中的应用成为可能。笔记本的功能变得很强大，几乎和台式机无异。而且，便携式电脑不仅能上网，还可以把学生同 图书馆等其它资源联系到一起。国家主管高等教育的官员们正在研究如何使笔记本电脑更好地帮助学生学习。

　　在韦斯特莱克大学，60%以上的教职员工使用电脑。笔记本电脑使得所有教师在教学中使用电脑成为可能。就像一名韦斯特莱克的老师说的：“我们位于弗吉尼亚的中心。我们为学生打开一扇面向世界的窗子。他们能看到一切，做到一切。”

　　词汇斟酌

　　?laptop n. 膝上型电脑，便携式电脑，笔记本电脑

　　?workable a. 可使用的

　　?desktop n. 桌上型电脑

　　?portable a. 手提的，便携的

　　佳句临摹

　　①【注释】have access to有权使用

　　【临摹】Citizens may have free access to the library.市民可以自由使用图书馆。

　　②【注释】in addition另外，除此之外

　　【临摹】In addition, intelligence also depends on an adequate diet, a good education and a decent home environment.另外,智力的高低还取决于充够的营养、优秀的教育和良好的家庭环境。

　　思如泉涌

　　Computers and scientific tools should not replace school education.计算机和科学工具不应取代学校教育。

　　Modern technology makes life more convenient; tools are the milestones of the technology as well as human being’s progress.现代科技使生活更加便捷;工具是科技进步和人类进步的里程碑。