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  高考英语精选满分作文(一)

  2. 参考词汇:配件—— spare part;

  3. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好(不计入你所写词数);

  4.已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。

  Dear Sir,

  I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.

  Thank you for your consideration.

  Sincerely yours,

  Bu Manyi

  高考英语精选满分作文点评

  本文内容要点齐全,语言丰富,结构合理,如头两句说明了购买手机后发现故障的情况,中间部分说明了无法维修而必须让公司更换手机的原委,最后明确提出自己的要求,明白流畅,将题目所提出的要点全部表达清楚,较好的完成了任务。全文以一般过去时为基调,结合主动语态与被动语态,并使用了so, but, therefore 等连接词,使文章结构完整严密。固定短语,如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用,使文章的语言显得地道而精炼。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.绝望的 3. consideration n.体谅

  好句To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.

  令我失望的是,他说因为在中国是新款手机,所以没有配件来修理。

  评析:复杂句的组织; to my disappointment, 常用短语。

  高考英语精选满分作文(二)

  【试题回放】实现有效的沟通,建立良好的人际关系,不仅要善于言表,更要学会倾听。请你根据下表中所提供的信息,写一篇题为“Being a Good Listener” 的英文演讲稿。

  为何倾听表示尊重,增进理解,建立良好的人际关系

  谁来倾听家长倾听孩子理解孩子,消除代沟,……

  老师倾听学生了解学生,满足需求,……

  同学相互倾听增进友谊,互帮互学,……

  怎样倾听(请考生联系自己拟定内容,列举两至三点。)

  注意:

  1、 对所给要点,逐一陈述,适当发挥,不要简单翻译。

  2、 词数150左右。开头和结尾已经写好,不计入总词数。

  3、 演讲稿中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。

  Good afternoon, everyone.

  The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.

  Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.

  Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

  What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.

  Thank you for your listening!

  高考英语精选满分作文点评

  这是一篇感情真挚、热情洋溢的演讲稿,文中大量运用排比句型,不但准确流畅地表达出题目中所提供的信息,而且体现出作者熟练运用英语的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同结构的复合句式,将倾听的对象及其作用阐述得淋漓尽致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句议论应如何倾听,则更进一步地增强了这篇演说稿的说服力。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1.promote v .促进 2. interpersonal adj.人际的

  3. generation gap. 代沟 4. open-minded adj. 虚心的

  好句1. students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

  同学之间应该互相倾听,这样他们可以互相学习和帮助,也会形成友谊。

  评析:复杂句的组合,被动句的使用。

  2. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.

  我想强调的是我们每个人都应该更多的倾听他人。

  评析:复合句的使用。

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